THE KISS
His eyes were of darkness
Reflections from his soul
His heart had been shattered
Left broken and cold
He was a warrior
Fighting for what was wrong
He came to me one night
When he heard my soulful cry
Under the moon we met
Fell into an icy embrace
It sent shivers up my spine
Just to stare upon his face
He held me in his arms
Fighting against my will
Using his power to control me
All I could do was stand still
He kissed my lips
Sending fear through me
Making my mind race
As he watched my body
I looked into his eyes
Fire was what I saw
He saw right through
My helpless disguise
We stared at each other
Moving closer than before
He saw in my eyes
I was not afraid anymore
Once again he kissed me
This time I kissed him back
Two dark souls together
Both evil and black
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Labels: Kiss, evil, eyes
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Wow....!! Great Feeling shared via poem.....But I am confused I feel same like you while kissing "Riddhi" on lips at honeymoon.....!
ReplyDeleteI had a question that Is every person feel same while kissing to his/her loved soul????
Very intense lines. You have been able to create a genuine poem out of a much written about topic.
ReplyDelete@Harshal: I am happy that you are enjoying your newly wedded life...Yes,it feels great to be kissed by the one you love.
ReplyDelete@Subhorup: Thank you.
ReplyDeletenice lines on kiss ( the most sensible emotion )
ReplyDeleteI too have something about kiss
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What a soulful kiss! Only you could kiss and tell :)
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic alpana...great portray f emotions by you..intense love n dark poetry!!
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Mani
Wonderful, I loved this, great words on a kiss.
ReplyDelete@Readitt: Thank u,and I read your post,its wonderful.
ReplyDelete@Rahul: You made my day..thanks.
ReplyDelete@Mani: Thank u.
ReplyDelete@Jan: Thank u,your words mean a lot to me.
ReplyDeleteTwo dark souls or two enlightened souls? :) Lovely lovely lovely poem, Alpana.
ReplyDelete//"Two dark souls together
ReplyDeleteBoth evil and black"//
Fantastic !!!
Very well expressed!
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I can relate to this now! Only the last night I had my first 'mistletoe kiss'! a poem about it is forming in my mind this very moment! But, oh, but why that 'dark' in the end? I couldn't comprehend it.
ReplyDelete-Autumn Eliza(ELLE)
Superb
ReplyDeletesuch a beautiful poem... loved it....
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ReplyDelete@Elle:Thanks,I wanted it to have a different end...its basically my thoughts on a situation or a relationship that i wanted to refuse,but couldn't.
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ReplyDeletePassionate and intense... Yes kiss feels that way :) Beautifully put :)
ReplyDeleteWow, that shocked me. And i like being shocked. Awesome poem is awesome :) love it...
ReplyDeleteTake care and keep writing..........
Unknowingly while writing the poem you seemed to have kissed Alfred Noyes 's "The highwayman".
ReplyDeleteBut then that feel has been over-said over the years.
I liked your poem in parts. Liked it when you say:
He held me in his arms
Fighting against my will
Using his power to control me
All I could do was stand still
Quite visual & graphic.
But throughout the remaining poem I kept searching for a plot. A visual.
You seem overwhelmed with the concept of knight in shining armor. It shows when you say :
He was a warrior
Fighting for what was wrong
He came to me one night
When he heard my soulful cry
The moonlit night also makes your sets pretty Victorian. But the moon too remains passive throughout your poem. Expected a greater role.
am a poet myself. Not a famous one (rather an under-closet one). Thus I don't wait for ice-breaking when talking to another poet. Hope to comeback soon.
Two dark souls together...just evil and black.
ReplyDeleteI loved it.
I wonder if you know, that your pain, fury, hope and struggle actually come out in each and every one of your writings.
I'm becoming a fan :)
wow .............kiss under d moon rooomantic
ReplyDeletevery well written :)
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Awesome poem <3
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ReplyDeleteAbsolutely fantastic poem. So passionate, full of emotions...
ReplyDeleteYou are in a completely different league Alpana, I'm a huge admirer of your writing now :)
Oooo two dark souls...hmmm...I'd take it lightly LOL...sounds like me and... :P
ReplyDeleteLoved how kisses could be delectable and hold one in a trance ;)
it is always magical.. always! :)
ReplyDeleteWell Expressed...
ReplyDeleteAwesome and hot description! Beautiful!
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Second paragraph onwards you just flow with it...Beautiful...
ReplyDeleteSecond paragraph onwards you just flow with it...Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteNice writeup :)
ReplyDeletevery warm and beautiful emotions and magically woven to words
Nice writeup :)
ReplyDeletevery warm and beautiful emotions and magically woven to words
woaah...that was beautiful...
ReplyDeleteregards
rahul
Loved the poem, lost myself in it, I can feel the warrior, I wanna kiss him too :)
ReplyDeleteHello.
ReplyDeleteWoW! This is intense. The souls might be evil, but when possessed by love, the light will shine through.
Simply beautiful, Alpana.
Nice imagery too.
Thanks for sharing.
Wow! That was dark and intense. The guy reminded me of Heathcliff in Wuthering Heights. Dark, handsome and something menacing about him. I guess one will become putty to be kissed like that. Beautifully passionate poem Alpana
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